Comments for Anthony Richardson writes stories that are funny http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com Short stories funny comedy funny short stories Thu, 07 May 2009 15:02:06 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on Not really anything like buses by chicken little http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/2009/01/12/not-really-anything-like-buses/#comment-102 chicken little Thu, 07 May 2009 15:02:06 +0000 http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/?p=117#comment-102 and derm just sitting there, like all is normal. this is too funny and derm just sitting there, like all is normal. this is too funny

]]> Comment on Not really anything like buses by chicken little http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/2009/01/12/not-really-anything-like-buses/#comment-101 chicken little Thu, 07 May 2009 14:58:53 +0000 http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/?p=117#comment-101 wrong color, but cmon, maybe diseased or organ transplanted...i dont know wrong color, but cmon, maybe diseased or organ transplanted…i dont know

]]> Comment on Not really anything like buses by chicken little http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/2009/01/12/not-really-anything-like-buses/#comment-100 chicken little Thu, 07 May 2009 14:58:03 +0000 http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/?p=117#comment-100 how could you not notice that? how could you not notice that?

]]> Comment on Not really anything like buses by chicken little http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/2009/01/12/not-really-anything-like-buses/#comment-99 chicken little Thu, 07 May 2009 14:55:28 +0000 http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/?p=117#comment-99 dont wear that belt in still shots anymore dont wear that belt in still shots anymore

]]> Comment on Unparalled success of album cover painting by Charlie http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/2008/08/27/unparalled-success-of-album-cover-painting/#comment-47 Charlie Tue, 13 Jan 2009 20:03:54 +0000 http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/?p=52#comment-47 This post looks regrettably like lies. This post looks regrettably like lies.

]]> Comment on Week 11 The Birds only Sing When Nobody’s There by sogoodsoright http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/week-11-the-birds-only-sing-when-nobodys-there/#comment-38 sogoodsoright Fri, 12 Dec 2008 15:37:32 +0000 http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/?page_id=101#comment-38 General impression: I was carried through the whole thing with absolute pleasure, but without any real sympathy for the drama of Will's separation and detachment from his son. As I read it, despite the introduction, the twisted family scene and cat's accusations, the dramatic aspect still seemed a little to much like convenient attachments to a couple of (very) good ideas you had.... So by the final line "the second chance he was never going to get, and for all the warmth that didn’t exist", which I guess should leave me feeling something emotionally (hey it's just a guess, I don't know what you intended), I felt myself anticipating more bizarre and darkly humorous situations I could enjoy, rather than worrying about W's plight and wondering what will happen. and sadly, my eye skipped right over more sensuous flashbacks e.g. "Porridge would be cooking on the hob..." In fact I can see how this would be a nice tight short story, minus a few details about Sam's love life, but I had trouble seeing how I could stay involved in a novel (although I've not read the other extract, maybe I'd have a better idea afterwards). Really sharp details of the woman's house, I could really picture it without being over Creative Writinged... Thought the opening description of the Cat was too long, like: "look how zany this situation is - let's ogle it for a while." The punchline of sorts "It's just a book of cartoons - stupid animal" didn't seem worth the effort - I've heard other variations on this shaggy dog story before. That's not to say the idea of a talking animal reading the Far Side didn't hit the spot - nice one! Sorry if a little over-critical, this is quite a personal critique.. I imagine other people have had very different experiences.. above all I just want to keep pushing you towards your own high standards - otherwise, as always, enormously inventive and funny a nice dark streak that gets yet darker as time goes on... xx General impression: I was carried through the whole thing with absolute pleasure, but without any real sympathy for the drama of Will’s separation and detachment from his son. As I read it, despite the introduction, the twisted family scene and cat’s accusations, the dramatic aspect still seemed a little to much like convenient attachments to a couple of (very) good ideas you had…. So by the final line “the second chance he was never going to get, and for all the warmth that didn’t exist”, which I guess should leave me feeling something emotionally (hey it’s just a guess, I don’t know what you intended), I felt myself anticipating more bizarre and darkly humorous situations I could enjoy, rather than worrying about W’s plight and wondering what will happen. and sadly, my eye skipped right over more sensuous flashbacks e.g. “Porridge would be cooking on the hob…”

In fact I can see how this would be a nice tight short story, minus a few details about Sam’s love life, but I had trouble seeing how I could stay involved in a novel (although I’ve not read the other extract, maybe I’d have a better idea afterwards).

Really sharp details of the woman’s house, I could really picture it without being over Creative Writinged…

Thought the opening description of the Cat was too long, like: “look how zany this situation is – let’s ogle it for a while.” The punchline of sorts “It’s just a book of cartoons – stupid animal” didn’t seem worth the effort – I’ve heard other variations on this shaggy dog story before. That’s not to say the idea of a talking animal reading the Far Side didn’t hit the spot – nice one!

Sorry if a little over-critical, this is quite a personal critique.. I imagine other people have had very different experiences.. above all I just want to keep pushing you towards your own high standards – otherwise, as always, enormously inventive and funny a nice dark streak that gets yet darker as time goes on…

xx

]]> Comment on Writing a novel by Beth http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/2008/11/04/writing-a-novel/#comment-37 Beth Thu, 04 Dec 2008 20:20:28 +0000 http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/?p=92#comment-37 Hi, Just want to say I love the novel extract! More more more!! Beth Hi,

Just want to say I love the novel extract!
More more more!!

Beth

]]> Comment on Note Found in Alice Ryner’s Locker During the End of Term Clear-out by sogoodsoright http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/note-found-in-alice-ryners-locker-during-the-end-of-term-clear-out/#comment-36 sogoodsoright Wed, 03 Dec 2008 16:37:42 +0000 http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/?page_id=33#comment-36 Made me laugh out loud a couple of times esp. "...because our passion is officially forbidden by both Barbara and the Education Secretary". The second letter for me was an interesting and piss funny postscript, I've not read anything like that from you before, "serving apple tart" put a big smile on my face... Maybe you milked the joke a bit in the first letter ; ) And this old exam moderator sounds a lot like some of your other narrators... how about a new character? An old Burkina Faso hooker (extra points if she doesn't speak English)? A piece of fluff in your own tummy button?... nar, they'd still have the Richardson touch we know and love........ Hope you're OK mate x Mike Made me laugh out loud a couple of times esp. “…because our passion is officially forbidden by both Barbara and the Education Secretary”.

The second letter for me was an interesting and piss funny postscript, I’ve not read anything like that from you before, “serving apple tart” put a big smile on my face…

Maybe you milked the joke a bit in the first letter ; ) And this old exam moderator sounds a lot like some of your other narrators… how about a new character? An old Burkina Faso hooker (extra points if she doesn’t speak English)? A piece of fluff in your own tummy button?… nar, they’d still have the Richardson touch we know and love……..

Hope you’re OK mate x Mike

]]> Comment on Week Four: This is Only a Poem Because it’s Short and Each Line Begins by sogoodsoright http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/week-four-this-is-only-a-poem-because-it%e2%80%99s-short-and-each-line-begins/#comment-35 sogoodsoright Wed, 03 Dec 2008 16:24:57 +0000 http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/?page_id=74#comment-35 more like this please xx Mike more like this please xx Mike

]]> Comment on Week Four by Mark Sullivan http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/2008/09/29/week-four/#comment-31 Mark Sullivan Fri, 14 Nov 2008 11:24:35 +0000 http://mentalnoise.wordpress.com/?p=76#comment-31 60 words. Hmmm. I say cut it by a 1/3 and leave out all the pronouns, the connecting words - and, the, or, because - basically so that it's just a stream of half-connected ideas. get rid of the capital letters. translate it into french using altavista babelfish. translate it into german. translate it back into Ingerlish. Now, my friend, you have a poem. leave to cool on a wire tray for 20 minutes and publish. I thank you 60 words. Hmmm. I say cut it by a 1/3 and leave out all the pronouns, the connecting words – and, the, or, because – basically so that it’s just a stream of half-connected ideas.
get rid of the capital letters. translate it into french using altavista babelfish. translate it into german. translate it back into Ingerlish.

Now, my friend, you have a poem. leave to cool on a wire tray for 20 minutes and publish.

I thank you

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